A Game of Toys | Chapter 1
Spasms of sore muscles, and angry shouts prodded the boy to his senses, Get up idiot, or do I have to kiss you? Rubbing his palms together, the Watcher gave a mischievous grin.
For a moment, a sudden pause of doubt wafted into his mind, that disappeared with a wave of disbelief crossed his mind as the draft of warm air creeping up his throat cleared his mind. Trying to shout, he felt his body tense up, immobilizing himself. Breathing hard, he ran until his eyes snapped open and gave an irritated glance at the Watcher, Who do you think I am, Sleeping Beauty? Last time I checked, I wasnt.
Last time you checked, he turned around to face the Watcher, who was rubbing his forehead gently, you were probably dead. And I wasnt seriously going to actually do it.
The dead cant think, the boy said, furiously, trying to ignore the Watchers last comment.
A faint sigh streamed from the Watchers breath as he continued with a foul mood, that is beside the point, while quietly he added to himself, accept that you also hurt me... and
do you have an iron head? Why does it only hurt me
?
Then what is the point? Get to it already. Wincing, he a nauseous feeling crept up from his bowels as a dark haze gathered before his eyes, closing them with tiredness. Reopening them, he found himself in a dark room, where a lone chair sat with a womans back facing him. Next to him, stood a young boy who could have been much like a younger version of himself.
Before her stood a large open window, almost as wide as the room itself, promise me that you will remember this.
I will! An unbefitting solemn expression placed itself on the child face, considering that his age was no more than six.
Head bent over, she spoke in a hushed whisper, You must never forget who you are, dear child, and must always remember to never utter your name.
Not moving from his place, the child craned his neck, as if hoping to get a better look. I promise, but
why are you crying?
No matter what, I will always be praying for your safety. Now go with my bless. As the heavy oak doors blew open, her voice was cut off leaving the final word unknown, and the only sound remaining was that of his beating heart that resounded in the cold darkness.
As the haze dispersed, he rubbed his eyes and opened them to the Watchers peering face. He jerked his head back, as a solid thump gave way to a blossoming of pain onto the back of his head, dont surprise me like that, please, and you were saying a moment ago
? There was a small, unnerving smile on his face.
Hmmm
Your eyes look funny. Did you see something, perhaps? Tapping his fingers between the boys dizzy eyes, he mused, and gave the boy a thoughtful glance. Staring upward for a moment, his gaze slid back as he grabbed the boys elbow to prevent him from standing, You arent going anywhere as of the moment, this is payback. Noticing the clueless face, he pointed to the angry bruise on his forehead.
Shrugging, he let off a loose stream of words, so what if I saw something. It doesnt matter to you, and once again, what were you going to say earlier?
Ill find out eventually, as it affects me more than you. Though, as for earlier, I was about to mention the need to new names, before you fainted, Princess. These ones wont work
well
Fine, but dont call me
Princess, he said, shuddering, he felt his mind slip back to the hazethere was something oddly familiar about the room.
Raising an eyebrow, he shrugged; Whatever you want to go by. Regardless, I have already decided upon the names. Well
actually its more as if its your name that needs changing. Mine has already been set for a while, and for your own knowledge, that name would be Faust. As for you, youll be going as Alarik, understood?
Yeah, and then glared at Fausts suspicious glance.














Comments
And thank you so much for the free links to my novel! Its super nice of you!
I'm really having a hard time finding anything to critique...So I'm gonna nit-pick ^^
*cracks nuckles*
"Hmmm Your eyes look funny. Did you see something, perhaps? Tapping his fingers between the boys eyes, he mused, and gave the boy a thoughtful glance. "
Why do the boys eyes look funny? Can watchers see things in eyes that normal people can't, or were his pupils dialated or something?
"Raising an eyebrow, he shrugged, Whatever you want to go by."
That comma after shrugged should be a semicolon or a period >.<(I had to say it)
I'm liking the PAGE TURNER a lot
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"Fancy thinking the Beast was something you could hunt and kill! You knew, didnt you? Im part of you? Close, close, close! Im the reason why its no go? Why things are what they are?"
-Lord of the Flies
=O I totally missed the eye part! Yes, that would be super important to put in. ><''' I think his eyes are more dizzy, and not concentrated.
As for the semicolon and period stuff, I tend to have a little trouble with them, so constant input on that would be awesome.
Yay~ Can start on the next chapter now. If it isn't out tomorrow, it'll be next week (since I'm going down to Portland to pick-up my sister & piano teacher from the music festival).
Sorry. I'm in that kind of mood for some reason. I'll adequately critique asap sorry lol
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"Fucking great. I'm stuck with an objectively confused teenager and a sexually frigid chinese pimp wannabe..."
xD Critique whenever you want. I'm too lazy to put the next chapter up right now. rofl
And okay. I'll just re-write and proofread etc in my extra time.
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"Fucking great. I'm stuck with an objectively confused teenager and a sexually frigid chinese pimp wannabe..."
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"Fucking great. I'm stuck with an objectively confused teenager and a sexually frigid chinese pimp wannabe..."
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